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Re:Article for critique - 06/28/2007
In the same vein:
One thing that we must be careful of as writers is to not fall in love with our free write.
Wouldn't this sound better as:
One thing that we must be careful of as writers is to avoid falling in love with our free write.
Also, you use "that" quite a bit in this piece. For instance:
I think that this process is important... seems to cry out for rewriting as:
I believe this process is important
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