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Re:Poem for feedback - 05/31/2007
I did like the "flow" of this one as well.
The evolution line was lost on me, however... both in its meaning within the poem's larger context and seeming not to quite fit the rest of the imagery... owing to the word "evolution" having such a scientific connotation at this point in our collective consciousness, I suppose (?)
The rest of the poem has a dark and passionate texture, and a slight edginess as the feeling of loss of control inherent to floods and tides becomes tangible.
Nice one.
Post edited by: apostrophe, at: 06/01/2007
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