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Re:The Tale of Mebrinde Kelven - 08/22/2006
Sorry about the move Robert but there was some clarification/ resorting done and all original works of fiction are now here.
Robert, I really liked the story. My disappointment came in how much got left out. What you have here is the outline for a book all on it's own. I know that this is only the setup for the adventures to follow but I wanted things fleshed out more. What kinds of things led to her becoming so warped that she could kill her parents without a qualm? Was there indeed no problem killing her parents or was there an internal struggle which I don't know about? Those are just a couple of examples that come to mind.
It's a great start. You left me wanting more and that's always a good thing for a writer to hear.
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