antryg
Moderator
Moderator
| Posts: 193 |  |
Karma: 5
|
Re:Help needed with poem - 08/16/2006
Robert the Bard wrote:
I don't see any problems with it. I liked it.
Here's the problem that I see. I feel like there is a "gap" between the first stanza and the rest of the poem. I feel like the 2nd stanza on flows seamlessly but there is a jarring "something different" between the 1st stanza and the rest of the poem. Now that I point out my objection, do you see a problem?
|
Forum 
